I have discovered a flaw in my writing style.
I often say what it it before I say why it is important.
Example
Disentangling health effects of environmental from social factors
is difficult for a variety of reasons. The effort to examine and
to separate environmental and social causes is nevertheless
valuable. [WHY IS IT VALUABLE?] This is especially important to
policy makers and to others who seek to maximise the public
good. A greater understanding of their respective contributions
will lead to more rational, deep-seated, lasting and effective
interventions.
The caps question is from someone reading my draft. I need to start with the why. Perhaps just turn the paragraph on its head?
Example
A greater understanding of the respective contributions from
environmental and social factors will lead to more rational,
deep-seated, lasting and effective interventions by policy makers
and to others who seek to maximise the public good. Disentangling
health effects of environmental from social factors is difficult
for a variety of reasons. The effort to examine and to separate
environmental and social causes is nevertheless valuable.
